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(Contains: strong language)
Be my darkest nightmare-
the position must be filled.
The day-to-day won't scare me now;
I want something that will.

Maybe it's a secret,
hidden deep inside my heart;
but once revealed, you can be sure
it'll tear me the fuck apart!

Maybe it's a memory,
simply eclipsed within my mind-
and daily I'll go searching
for things I don't want to find.

Maybe it's when I realize
that I'm a broken, evil man;
and no matter what is said to me,
I refuse to understand.

And no matter where you point me to,
I'm finding my own way-
ignoring the consequences and not caring what they say.
And if I'm not a lifeless wreck come the closing of the day,
won't you embody all my darkness
as to keep the light at bay?
Written as "Embody my Darkness" on 12.6.13. This is a little experiment on different subject matter- you might see me publishing a little more "openly psychotic/embracing insanity" themed writings as well as more image prompts to come soon.

I'm sorry for the relative inactivity recently, my mom's been using my laptop for job applications ( even though it's literally MY laptop. x.x )

#29, "Dark", in my 100 Themes Challenge found here: fav.me/d6c5aw2
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Given 2013-12-19
:icondarklightseekerart:
DarklightseekerArt Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013
Overall, this is great.

Last, but not least, congrats on getting the DD.
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:iconunfuck-the-world:
Unfuck-the-World Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you c:
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:icontheartzyowl:
TheArtzyOwl Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I love this.  O:  It's fantastic!
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:iconunfuck-the-world:
Unfuck-the-World Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Student Writer
I'm glad you like it ^_^
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:iconkarinta:
Karinta Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Student General Artist
Very interesting - I like the wry rhyming.
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:iconunfuck-the-world:
Unfuck-the-World Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Student Writer
Reminds me of another piece I wrote a while back, "Without a Voice". I'm glad you liked it c:
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:iconkarinta:
Karinta Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Student General Artist
:glomp:
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:iconunfuck-the-world:
Unfuck-the-World Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Student Writer
:dummy:
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:iconthegalleryofeve:
TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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:iconunfuck-the-world:
Unfuck-the-World Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Student Writer
I'm honoured, believe me. c:
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magdalenacaracol Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013
very dramatic
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:icontraceofhatred:
TraceofHatred Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's interesting - but I feel like the ABCB and ABAB rhyme schemes really takes away from the quality of the piece.

It feels predictable because of it - I feel like going into freeverse or even a change of structure would put so much more depth into your writing than sticking with such a simple template.

But that's just my opinion, of course - I myself personally don't like writing within the confines of "rhyme schemes" and such try to avoid it.
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:iconunfuck-the-world:
Unfuck-the-World Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Student Writer
I occasionally will use really "uppity" or almost nursery-rhyme-like rhyme schemes with darker or more serious subject matter to leave a bit of irony when it's read. I've been trying to vary my style, and I realize it's the only way I'll ever excel at writing in general. Thanks for the feedback <3
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TraceofHatred Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Not a worry!
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Hawkheart29 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Interesting, for most people it's the other way around.
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KyuremObsession Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is amazing~!
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:iconunfuck-the-world:
Unfuck-the-World Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you c:
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GrotesqueDarling13 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Professional General Artist
Extremely beautiful piece, so worthy of a DD.
Congrats!!! :D I really loved how this piece
seemed to flow effortlessly off my tongue :love:
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:iconunfuck-the-world:
Unfuck-the-World Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Student Writer
I love writing that flows fluently <3 I'm glad you think so, and thank you c:
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GrotesqueDarling13 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Professional General Artist
You're so, so welcome!!! :D
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Tarzok Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013
:clap::clap::clap:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013

Congratulations on the Daily D feature for your poem.  It's a subject I know well, and used to write much more about the darkness within one's self over the years past.


Meantime, I'd like to make a suggest about the structure of the poem's last stanza, for flow and to continue the structure throughout (plus I feel you don't need the question mark):


And no matter where you point me to,
I'm finding my own way-
ignoring the consequences

and not caring what they say.


And if I'm not a lifeless wreck

come the close of day,
won't you embody all my darkness
to keep the light at bay.


It's only a suggestion.  And thank you.

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Itsukiart Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
and blood to the blood god
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :heart:
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:iconunfuck-the-world:
Unfuck-the-World Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you c:
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure :heart:
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The-Grey-Panther Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
 :iconsweethugplz: This is beautiful.
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:iconunfuck-the-world:
Unfuck-the-World Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you <3 :iconblushplz:
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The-Grey-Panther Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconahehplz: You're welcome!
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xXProphecyUnicornXx Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013
i love this Cx
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:iconunfuck-the-world:
Unfuck-the-World Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks; I have a few more sitting loose in the cover of my notebook that I haven't uploaded yet, so those will come really soon c:
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xXProphecyUnicornXx Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013
awesome ! ^_^
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